Discrimination Lives Within Everyone
Discrimination, what enters your mind when this word is used in our everyday
lives. The definition of discrimination means treatment or consideration of, or
making a distinction in favor of or against, a person or thing based on the group,
class, or category to which that person or thing belongs rather than on individual
merit etc, racial and religious intolerance and discrimination. Honestly i must
say i do practice discrimination at times.
We as humans cannot deny the fact that discrimination lives in us no
matter how small the feeling is. Discrimination starts in a child as early as 7 or 8. Many indian kids get teased because of their darker complexion this happens in many schools nowadays. These kind of actions actually start from the education their parents give their children early in their lives. Their parents would tell them racist stories about other races to entertain their children and this will actually encourage the seed of racism to grow in their childrens soul. With this their children will grow up to hate other races Furthermor, children of this age think that making fun of their friends is funny because their doing it in a group or alone. They do not know what it feel like being teased like this. It is proven that when children do this to one another, the victim will grow up to be mentally disturbed as the early years of a child is where his mind is given time to expand and grow before they become adults.
In order to rid
ourselves of discrimination we all have to work together and get a grip on
reality. Discrimination can lead to fights and from fights it will evolve into wars which can render ones live chaotic within weeks. Do we really want to
live in this type of environment? Is it worth giving your life for this
senseless fight? We must join the battle against discrimination though a
variety of organizations that fight discrimination together. Many websites and
town organizations can be joined to help fight discrimination. Join the
organizations that fit your personality best. For example, if racial
discrimination is something you deal with, join peers who have the same
problem. Together knowledge can be spread to help fight the problem. These
groups host town lectures in the public library or school to teach the negative
effects of discrimination.
Next, If you believe that discrimination at your child's school has occurred, it's important for you to take action. Don't assume that it will stop if it's ignored, or that you'll "only make it worse" if you speak up. Children with disabilities can be at a greater risk of being teased or bullied. Talk with your child about bulling and harassment. Make sure she understands that she must avoid confrontations not matter how hard it is to walk away. Talk with your child's class. Ask the teacher if you might have the opportunity to tell the class about your child and answer any questions the students might have. Give your child the information he needs to respond to questions about his disability. Help your child develop friendships with children from her class or school. Give your child tools to help deal with teasing and help him learn to ignore it or pretend there is an "invisible shield" around him. Let your child know that it's 'OK' to tell an adult when she is being teased or harassed. Talk with your child's teacher. Sometimes children with disabilities aren't included in activities because it is assumed they can't participate. This is also another form of discrimination which is highly done by teachers.
Next, If you believe that discrimination at your child's school has occurred, it's important for you to take action. Don't assume that it will stop if it's ignored, or that you'll "only make it worse" if you speak up. Children with disabilities can be at a greater risk of being teased or bullied. Talk with your child about bulling and harassment. Make sure she understands that she must avoid confrontations not matter how hard it is to walk away. Talk with your child's class. Ask the teacher if you might have the opportunity to tell the class about your child and answer any questions the students might have. Give your child the information he needs to respond to questions about his disability. Help your child develop friendships with children from her class or school. Give your child tools to help deal with teasing and help him learn to ignore it or pretend there is an "invisible shield" around him. Let your child know that it's 'OK' to tell an adult when she is being teased or harassed. Talk with your child's teacher. Sometimes children with disabilities aren't included in activities because it is assumed they can't participate. This is also another form of discrimination which is highly done by teachers.
In conclusion, we
have to think more rasionally because if we let discrimination flow through our
lives, a war will start one day. We have to be more careful of what we say and
what we do everyday. Being a chinese boy, i hope to not cultivate this habit of
discrimination anymore in my life.
Weak sentence: The definition of discrimination means treatment or consideration of, or making a distinction in favor of or against, a person or thing based on the group, class, or category to which that person or thing belongs rather than on individual merit etc, racial and religious intolerance and discrimination.
ReplyDeleteWhy: This is because this sentence is obviously directly copied and pasted from a certain source or referred to from somewhere else, and it did not have the essence of the author's writing style in it.
Weak Words:
a) funny - hilarious
b)if we let discrimination "flow" through our lives - continue to flourish
What I like:
I like the direct conveying of message from the author's point of view, without any concealment.
He also gives the reader a very real take on what is going on in our daily lives that is regarding discrimination.
Parts that drag:
The author only focuses on a very general view of discrimination, and does not thoroughly show how discrimination can be practiced besides racism.
Parts that I lose interest:
"Talk with your child about bulling and harassment. Make sure she understands that she must avoid confrontations not matter how hard it is to walk away. Talk with your child's class. Ask the teacher if you might have the opportunity to tell the class about your child and answer any questions the students might have. Give your child the information he needs to respond to questions about his disability. Help your child develop friendships with children from her class or school. Give your child tools to help deal with teasing and help him learn to ignore it or pretend there is an "invisible shield" around him. Let your child know that it's 'OK' to tell an adult when she is being teased or harassed. Talk with your child's teacher. "
This part is very repetitive and the sentence structure is too similar.
Use a wider vocabulary other than the daily words used in everyday speech.
Strongest sentence: Discrimination can lead to fights and from fights it will evolve into wars which can render ones live chaotic within weeks.
ReplyDeleteWhy: This sentence has a good structure and it catches the attention of the reader.
~Zhi Hao~
ReplyDeleteWhen you refer to yourself using the word 'I' it has to be caps locked. Besides that you are too long winded.
wee han, you go on and on and on about the same point. you need to have a topic sentence, elaborate and an example.
ReplyDeleteMany indian kids get teased because of their darker complexion. This happens in many schools nowadays.
ReplyDeleteIt is proven that when children do this to one another, the victim will grow up to be mentally disturbed as the early years of a child is WHEN his mind is given time to expand and grow before they become adults.
FurthermorE, children of this age think that making fun of their friends is funny because theY ARE doing it in a group or alone.